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Post by Palustris on May 26, 2022 16:46:22 GMT 1
This is the newest story. Criticism etc is most welcome. Whole book needs a snappy title too.
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Post by peonymad on May 27, 2022 10:27:27 GMT 1
It may come to us and/or you later as the story progresses.
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Post by hilberry on May 28, 2022 7:32:04 GMT 1
love the beans!
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Post by peonymad on May 28, 2022 9:57:32 GMT 1
Yes, quite a surprise, I wonder how the wall was built around them, do we get to find out or does it remain a mystery.
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Post by Palustris on May 30, 2022 12:59:58 GMT 1
This bit needs adding in Chapter Four, jst before they leave the Ban people's home
Billy thought for a few moments. "So, you weren’t born No.1 then?"
Pa shook his head. "No, I was actually 403." He sighed, "That was along time ago. I am just the latest in a long line of No.1's"
"So," went on Billy. That means that a lot of Bean people must have been killed for you to get to No.1."
"Most of them died of old age rather than being eaten," said Pa. "We are a very careful set of beings and while there are a lot of dangerous things in the Clough we can avoid them most of the time."
"That makes you the oldest Bean person then," mused Billy.
"It certainly does," laughed Pa. "And there are times when I feel it too. Now we had better get moving while the way is clear."
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Post by peonymad on May 31, 2022 15:40:24 GMT 1
Liking this story Pal, really can't see where this is going.
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Post by Miss Piggin on Jun 2, 2022 11:06:50 GMT 1
Early the next morning, Billy took his box and went down the alley. The string was still tied to the lamppost. He used his bike as a ladder and carefully hoisted the box up on to the top of the wall.
I think that should read bike, as he had already lowered the box into the Clough the day before.
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Post by Palustris on Jun 2, 2022 11:56:18 GMT 1
Thank-you and amended.
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Post by Miss Piggin on Jun 2, 2022 21:29:32 GMT 1
I hope we get to find out what happened to the bean people.
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Post by Palustris on Jun 3, 2022 11:55:29 GMT 1
Need a much better headline for the report in the paper. Not my area of expertise.
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Post by Palustris on Jun 4, 2022 14:14:37 GMT 1
Also still need a title for the whole story. Shades of grey is a bit derivative.
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Post by hilberry on Jun 4, 2022 15:00:25 GMT 1
Billy, the beans and a dog.
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Post by Palustris on Jun 4, 2022 15:45:15 GMT 1
Billy, the beans and a dog. Billy Bean was a children's BBC programme from long before ITV existed. Billy Bean built a machine to see what it would do. He built it out of sticks and stones and lots of string and glue. |
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Post by hilberry on Jun 4, 2022 17:03:18 GMT 1
I didn't see that, maybe it was before we had telly in 1958. Sounds fun!
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Post by Miss Piggin on Jun 4, 2022 17:24:33 GMT 1
We didn't have our first telly until 1958 either. It came on my 6th birthday, so I thought it was mine!  |
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Post by Butternut on Jun 4, 2022 19:28:12 GMT 1
The things you learn, there is a real place called Greyton in South Africa! What about the accidental find or Greytons secrets? It was an enjoyable read.
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Post by Palustris on Jun 4, 2022 20:19:37 GMT 1
It is not easy is it?
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Post by peonymad on Jun 4, 2022 20:57:07 GMT 1
The lost dog found?
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Post by Palustris on Jun 5, 2022 21:01:19 GMT 1
"Over the Wall" was one suggestion, but there is a film of that name(cartoon).
How about "The Lost Triangle"?
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Post by Palustris on Jun 6, 2022 15:50:54 GMT 1
So Lost Triangle it is. Anyone come up with a headline?
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Post by peonymad on Jun 6, 2022 16:49:45 GMT 1
It's discovery and destruction.
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Post by Palustris on Nov 10, 2022 17:49:30 GMT 1
Available now at Amazon.https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B0BLYBK6M8.
Price has gone up though.
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Post by peonymad on Nov 10, 2022 18:53:24 GMT 1
Love the cover picture Pal, had to take the full stop at the end out of the web address to get it to load. Frankly a very reasonable price.
Well done.
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Post by Palustris on Nov 12, 2022 18:34:50 GMT 1
Got my copy today. Very pleased with the way it looks.
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Post by peonymad on Nov 12, 2022 19:23:09 GMT 1
Finally read the PDF nice to get everything in order, really enjoyed it Pal. Not over sweet, but so many phrases that bring back memories.
Did not read sooner having it seems spent at least 2 or 3 hours asleep each afternoon!
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Post by Palustris on Nov 12, 2022 21:20:54 GMT 1
That was Cloud cuckoo land? Worth printing then?
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Post by peonymad on Nov 13, 2022 9:48:23 GMT 1
Of course it was! Oh yes.
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